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in the embryo of the city
in their cage
they paint their nails not
knowing

that the sun is watching
from his trap door
in the cloud ceiling where
whales can't swim but go

to dream
and drop down their weight in rain
not measured in pints
but lives overflowed

in lost archipelagos full
of automatic islands
that catch the eyes like needles
when viewed from further away

than the end of the world
we're all evolving in the wrong direction
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darwin's revenge by ~thesquareroot ( Suggested by UnspecifiedUnknown and Featured by thorns )
:icontuishimi:
Very nice, had me in the first stanza. It's like a hazy dream in my mind.
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neurotype Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely imagery. I found some of the linebreaks awkward, but overall it paints a great picture. :)
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:iconthesquareroot:
thesquareroot Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
sorry if it was awkward. i was trying to use the enjambment in hopes of ostensibly paralleling the archipelago image. thanks for the comment :XD:
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mhi2x Jan 23, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
i loved this.....
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:iconthesquareroot:
thesquareroot Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :D
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:iconmhi2x:
mhi2x Jan 25, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
your welcome....
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7GreenRobin7 Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I don't usually comment on poetry, but I really enjoyed this ^^
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:iconthesquareroot:
thesquareroot Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :XD:
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salum9 Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very powerful
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Gadgetsmith Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
We really are all evolving in the wrong direction, but it seems nobody is willing to change this.
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